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    dots Submission Name: Scrapped, like everything Ive wrotedots
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    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 299
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 452
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2093



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       I just trashed this. I'm not progressing it anymore. I will revise, try to make it flow better. But, I don't care enough about the feeling, anymore. Fuck 'em.


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    dotsScrapped, like everything Ive wrotedots
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    Your maniacal ass ought to know, the suicidal thoughts you brought to her won't
    Be the reason for her leavin in a bloodstained evenin'
    You sustained your heatheness in what must've alleviated
    You from the pain of your own inadequacies
    If you wanna be mad at me, I'd rather be
    Not your friend, then for you to've brought her end
    And, yeah, I think it's sad to see you not acknowledge such a catastrophe
    But, sayin, your just playin it back at me is blasphemy
    You're attackin' me in a dastardly way
    Tragically, the way it has to be, but, that's okay
    Because, I'm used to bein' the bigger man
    You're confusin' me with what you've been
    It ain't backstabbin' I'm after, but, a deviation from the disasterly
    That ain't the path for me, I'm happily after what I have for me
    I don't need no fraudulent friends causin' problems callin themselves king
    But, I got em.
    I'll demolish your following wallowing in the problems your causin me
    At least I'm not them


    But, if you wanna run your mouth, get your story straight
    Cause, I'm comin' undone and I'm gonna run somethin' blunt into your face
    You're chasin a pace ya can't match
    In this race, it's a waste, if ya can't get past
    Yourself, your mind, you find this hell inside yourself
    An' try to unleash it unto me
    I've begun to see, you're done with being
    Anything, if any ever dare to bring
    Themself to my level, I'll level 'em
    If ever I'm to sever 'em, I'll forever damn myself to hell with 'em
    I embellish 'em with revelling perspectives
    Forever, myself, I'll respect it's
    All we've got in this world
    And you're lost in this whirlpool
    Causing yourself caustic thoughts which rule




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