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    dots Submission Name: The Eagle Has Landeddots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Eagle Has Landeddots
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    my world has become
    a walking wound
    and all the best thoughts
    are whistling in

    to the sly corridors
    of synaptic shock
    whirling like wolves
    with gleaming skin




    Submitted on 2009-04-04 12:08:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      to me this feels like the brain is firing much more than is comfortable and yet, that's how we create

    is there anything I can do? for me it's always best to let the pen fly

    and then the wolves stop by to eat my words

    take care,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2009-04-07 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      i kind of take this as finding words through pain.
    or that pain is a necessary sometimes to find the words.

    and maybe i am weird, but i never see wolves as a bad thing. though i suppose when used, they generally are in a metaphoric sense??? don't know.

    interesting title too... code name (insert something witty here).

    anyhoo, i think it very cool that you poem people's poems. inspiration comes from the quietest of places sometimes and i admire that you are able to find words to leave the rest of us with. kinda of a pay it forward...

    just thoughts.
    | Posted on 2009-04-05 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      Well Bill, I got a different picture to Daniel, so that is interesting. I see it as a wounded world fly-blown with maggots. I think it isn't too far wrong???? Clever write! Ted.
    | Posted on 2009-04-04 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, this is great for me.

    edgy phrasing...

    the first two lines of each stanza set up the rush of the closing lines so that you could imagine someone plodding through snow and leaking blood and then see wolves rushing in, slashing and away...

    I look at the piece from the individual sense as if the best thoughts whistle into a gaping wound at his side

    but if I step back and look at the bigger picture it speaks of climatic problems as well as conflict....as if tearing it all down is the thing.

    I love this one.
    | Posted on 2009-04-04 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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