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The Eagle Has Landed

Author: rws
ASL Info:    62/m/Ohio
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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The Eagle Has Landed

my world has become
a walking wound
and all the best thoughts
are whistling in

to the sly corridors
of synaptic shock
whirling like wolves
with gleaming skin

Submitted on 2009-04-04 12:08:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  to me this feels like the brain is firing much more than is comfortable and yet, that's how we create

is there anything I can do? for me it's always best to let the pen fly

and then the wolves stop by to eat my words

take care,

| Posted on 2009-04-07 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  i kind of take this as finding words through pain.
or that pain is a necessary sometimes to find the words.

and maybe i am weird, but i never see wolves as a bad thing. though i suppose when used, they generally are in a metaphoric sense??? don't know.

interesting title too... code name (insert something witty here).

anyhoo, i think it very cool that you poem people's poems. inspiration comes from the quietest of places sometimes and i admire that you are able to find words to leave the rest of us with. kinda of a pay it forward...

just thoughts.
| Posted on 2009-04-05 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
  Well Bill, I got a different picture to Daniel, so that is interesting. I see it as a wounded world fly-blown with maggots. I think it isn't too far wrong???? Clever write! Ted.
| Posted on 2009-04-04 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
  hey, this is great for me.

edgy phrasing...

the first two lines of each stanza set up the rush of the closing lines so that you could imagine someone plodding through snow and leaking blood and then see wolves rushing in, slashing and away...

I look at the piece from the individual sense as if the best thoughts whistle into a gaping wound at his side

but if I step back and look at the bigger picture it speaks of climatic problems as well as if tearing it all down is the thing.

I love this one.
| Posted on 2009-04-04 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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