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    dots Submission Name: Blood Curdled at The Chilling Quill 3dots
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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots Blood Curdled at The Chilling Quill 3dots
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    Blood Curdled at The Chilling Quill 3



    The night is too quiet for breathing
    The faces form
    Swelling from the pitch oily; floats
    Mouthless screaming
    Into monstrous caverns
    Where fang-ed teeth stalactite
    On slavering tongues

    Cold suffocation jabs pillowed rocks
    Deep into racing erratic heart
    And clamours the air on fingers bent
    With scratches awake on a coffin lid
    The weight of movement
    To slow to lift

    Raise your head and scuffle muted threats
    Dead hot blankets
    Of fevered dreams and swollen hands
    Push you over the edge
    And tight in your throat
    Breaks screeching into a panicked run
    With tied legs you twist
    Reclining pressed and pushed to escape
    But no freedom formulates
    As struggling madness reiterates
    Pressure barking
    At the corners of eyes

    Mouthless
    Screaming

    Screaming
    Mouthless

    Struggle
    Shake

    And eyes
    Suddenly

    Open

    You are awake






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