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    dots Submission Name: YES !dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsYES !dots

    YES !

    Written in my palms
    Within the plasma tempest of my cellular flow
    Courses in the pulmonary oxygen
    The direction linear fate
    Souls writing indicates
    Always through pass of time
    My breathing in
    Links my hands
    Physical over mental
    Pours consistent
    Suffused empire shudders
    Tangible still earthquakes
    On a single point
    Of longing

    It filters me
    Through the hours
    Designs my wishes
    Sleeping naked
    In a diaphragms rising
    Lake of want

    Each morning in helpless moans
    At this state
    The continent
    The ocean
    Of my empty arms
    Emptying this need in me
    Fills me more
    Than any love
    I have ever

    I hanker in swelling desire
    Even lust exhales
    Its animal fire
    And swims in the sails
    Storm wracked and howling
    As I sit motionless
    In this envelope
    Of aching final
    In what it means
    To be
    To me

    Powered by an undeniable
    The force surge
    And capitulates
    To recognition
    Without resistance
    Builds a formulation of my destiny
    Written in my palms
    Within the plasma tempest
    Of my cellular flow
    The thunderclap
    Resounds from above

    YES !

    I am in love

    ( And I weep
    And I laugh
    Each morning in helpless moans
    At this state
    The continent
    The ocean
    Of my empty arms )

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    "Within the plasma tempest of my cellular flow
    Courses in the pulmonary oxygen"
    What poets do you like?
    | Posted on 2009-04-09 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]

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