The Millionth Mile

Author: Voodoo_Lounge ASL Info:    21/F/OH Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171 Words: 120

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The Millionth Mile

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How dreadful to hear the brakes of a car And mistake it for my love, that i hoped would follow.... Allow me to lay here in my wounds And simply let me wallow. Has it so soon reached The stretch of the millionth mile? So weary no longer can i account for time nor season But i know that it must have been awhile. I clearly recall limping through These loathesome miles before But unsure of what i am at all I don't know if it can take it anymore. I have never been so far away Separated by a mere room. Makes me yearn for a blanket that could cover this mess For the safety of a steel cocoon.

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I'm sorry whatever happen to you , very heart felt poem , i feel your pain , your word are so sensitive , you express greatly in this poem the hurt and anger , don't bestow in a steel cocoon, get a new start in life , this poem has sentimental values , great writing , keep it up

| Posted on 2009-04-05 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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