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    dots Submission Name: Unpure White Snowdots
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    Author: saika
    ASL Info:    17-F-chicago
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 2/5/8
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 763
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1022



    Description:
       ugh...i was bored and needed to do something lol tell me if you like it or not...i don't really care...hm...


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    dotsUnpure White Snowdots
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    Did you...or anyone really...notice something?
    Snow....as i'm writing this it's snowing...


    If you think about it snow is alot like a persons love life
    At first it can start off as white and fresh and innocent but


    as it moves on....it can soon turn dark and the love can fade away...


    Snow falls from the sky
    And as it falls it's nothing...

    It's only a white speck
    In a whole group of other white snow

    By the time snow hits the ground
    is it even there anymore?
    Is it something else?
    Is there a change?

    No one notices even the smallest thing...
    But when it's gone...soon...
    Everyone begins to notice

    Love is the same....
    When you think about it...

    One small change just one..
    Can make it or Break it....

    Take nothing for granted...







    Submitted on 2009-04-05 19:43:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the snow figure, and how you expand it into a whole story about love. Also I like your "voice", your way of speaking - maybe because I think you're writing as yourself and not in some invented character!
    | Posted on 2010-03-18 00:00:00 | by lakesblue | [ Reply to This ]
      very good insight poem , wording execellent , detail nicely , i must watch the snow myself , the icey effects are very motional in your poetry , keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-06 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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