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    dots Submission Name: introduction into aetherdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 656
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    Description:
       alright-- i've had this for a while just never posted-- sry


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    dotsintroduction into aetherdots
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    listed written in stone
    my own thoughts turncoat
    in nought as i fought
    to burn both
    the bridges and the streets
    so i live within the beats
    in cadence ageless to make
    divisions when i speak

    as the pen chase freedom
    from the tricks, and pause
    then trips the cause
    to make the kid spit with awe.
    so forget the rahl dahl
    books that you're used to-
    as you reform to the call
    i refuse to.
    i choose creativity
    over nazi order.
    i make statements
    while neverminding borders
    unless i set them with
    a wet pen, leaving necks bent
    heaving steps to correct
    all the next men
    after me. i follow none
    and hollow some dreams
    swallow pride let aside
    i apollo some means of writing
    I'm aetherian
    the purest of my form
    and don't mistake the words
    they are the surest of my core
    so when you here me mentioned
    keep your props in check
    my flows demand attention
    not respect...




    Submitted on 2009-04-06 11:03:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Alright, so the title taught me a new word, and I love it.

    This is exactly what's wrong with mainstream music. People sell out to start with. They don't try to invent something, they try to be like someone.

    You've got a lot of talent and you give me something to aim for. Everything you post flows so well and seems so well put together. Some of my most flattering comments are people that love the "raw" sound of it..
    | Posted on 2009-05-18 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]


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