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Doveflight: A Prelude

Author: Shadowstar13
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Prelude to "Helena's Lament"

Doveflight: A Prelude

Her soul it fled this world then,
Flying on otherworldly winds of night
Her soul in blood-stained plumage then
Flew from this world in a blur of white

Her eyes shone like sapphires bright
Upon that cursed, god-poisoned night
If she'd only had the sense to flee
Before she dissolved into the light

I thought that I had seen it all:
I've seen battles fought on my shores
Seen sailors frolick with their whores
And the spoils of many bloody wars
Were spilled just before me

But there she stood, dressed all in light
Glowing like the moon above
Her very smile breaking the night
Waiting in hope for her "true love"

Glittering not half as well
Were the jewels on her throat and arms
Much gold and rubies, I could tell
If she wasn't careful, she'd come to harm

And so her beau came, cloaked in black-
An odd color in which to elope
With him he carried a small canvas sack
Tied loosely at the neck with some rope

She beamed wider still as he came close
Her joy seemed to outshine the moon
And her blue eyes glittered full of tears
Reflecting light as if of noon

His face was stone-well, I'd thought
Perhaps he is that kind of man
Ever brooding over his lot
In life-such people can
Attract the lasses more than a dandy.

She waited for the one she loved
He moved, then, as if to embrace
His hand then went to his side
Withdrew a dagger, drove it into the lace

And there she fell, all dressed in white
I felt my torrents turn to ice
He slashed her, more, with all his might
And she dropped like some pagan sacrifice

From off her neck he took the chain
And took her bracelets gold
As she stumbled up, screaming in pain
He dissapeared into the black

She walked, then crawled, calling out
But no one came to aid the maid
Then with one last mangled shout
She fell on the rocks, Charon's fee paid

Her blood my waves lapped up that night
And her tears, I did as well
Then, a sister heard of the poor bride's plight
And I predicted a raising of Hell.

In millenia I've never seen such love
And never seen it so betrayed
Her soul fled this world like a dove
White and red as the dress in which she was slain

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  Damn! lol I'm at a loss for words here. It was unbelievable, so good. lol I'm speechless!!


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