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    dots Submission Name: Ghostery Storedots
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    Author: Jeniffer
    ASL Info:    18/f/earth
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 240/279/81
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       This is a poem I wrote some time ago that I am reposting, for old time's sake....


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    dotsGhostery Storedots
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    There’s something strange in the air tonight
    And it’s messing with my head;
    We’re driving to the grocery store
    Because we’re out of milk and bread;

    The parking lot is empty –
    I feel my stomach flutter;
    But we must go to the store tonight –
    We really need butter!

    No monsters in the doorway,
    So far, so good;
    But I’m just hoping we get right out
    As soon as we buy the food.

    Mom cruises down the aisles,
    Kids right behind;
    Is that deli fish staring back at me,
    Or am I losing my mind?

    The butcher stares as we walk by,
    I wish he’d put down that axe!
    I feel his eyes, burning and strange
    Boring into our backs.

    The cashier doesn’t say a word
    As she rings up cans of Coke;
    She just stares ahead with a zombie’s eyes –
    This has got to be joke!

    A song is playing over the speakers,
    I think it’s called Monster Mash;
    All I want is to be safely home
    With a bowl of Heavenly Hash.

    But wait a second, something’s got my arm!
    It’s the creepy guy who mops the floor!
    I grab his mop, whack him over the head,
    And run after mom to the door.

    We race to the safety of the car,
    Unload the cart like never before;
    Get inside, and now we’re safe –
    BUT WAIT! There’s still the dollar store…..




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    ||| Comments |||
      "whatever happened to my transylvannia twist?"

    "it's now the mash"

    i love this piece...being a big fan of ghosts, spooky things, horror movies..

    i almost saw a parody of Dawn of the Dead and several other horror movies combined very poetically into a really fun package...

    sometimes our imaginations run wild...and as poets we are like that i think...seeing things others don't see...seeing into that other level..almost like those who see ghosts where others can't...

    imaginative piece, jeniffer.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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