Description: This is from the spring, so that explains it.
A Choir of Crickets -------------------------------------------
A choir of crickets
kept me company,
for I was unable to sleep,
and their voices cheered me,
for they mean that springtime
sas begun her dance,
and the white, solitary winter
will fade into memory
to be replaced by pink, yellow and green.
nice picture...looks beautiful there...though the poem is springy i like it...the part about the crikets keeping you company...i dont know i just got this image of it in my head...lol...anyways ...no complaintsvery enjoyable...smiles ange
for the last line you could either leave off the "and" or insert "and be replaced.." up in the Michigan north woods we hear those choirs of crickets all summer, but it has to be warm enough. Not there yet, no lightning bugs yet either. Have a good one. Dave
It's the wrong season here in the U.S. to be writing about that... but I thought it was really good! The lenth was fine and I love the title. Crickets are something I really associate with the coming of summer. Nice write!
spring fits very well to the weather outside. cloudy, then and again rain and less than 15°C (about 60°F). bad weather in Germany. but it will be nice, warm and sunny on the weekend if you can believe the forecasts. anyway I really like this piece. but as the others pointed out there's a 'be' missing in the last line.
when i moved down to florida, i had the hardest trouble sleeping...sonething was missing...it was those damn Michigan crickets...amazing how you can get so used to something without even realizing it...this was a very nice piece...brought back good memories, although i probably won't be able to sleep tonite and that will be all your fault...lol
i love the sound of crickets! perhaps that's what was keeping you awake! lol! i like the reference to the white snow at the end being replaced with pink, yellow and green. this is a sweet poem, ushering in the spring to come. i love season poems. thanks for sharing this oldie but goodie!
Lovely Amy, I too like the little harbingers of spring no matter what clas and order they belong to--I only dislike mosquitoes as a sure sign of summer! I think the only thing I would change is remove the "and" from the last line---or you could add "be" after the and--but I read it both ways and seems more like you without the and, Nice one. Silver
I fully agree, you're short a be. Then again, knowing you maybe, it could be a bee? I'll go look in the hivery, for some eloquent thievery of sweet honey. Right now i just cannot see. Nice poem as usual Amy.