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    dots Submission Name: Shadowed Lovedots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsShadowed Lovedots
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    Under the vexatious light
    Lowers their faces
    Their shadowed eyes
    hiding in lust

    Thundering rhythm
    Hitting harder
    Beating faster
    Yet they linger gracefully

    Slowly feeling each ones step
    Whispering voices
    From the tainting tongues
    Seduces their ears

    Under the pressuring rage
    A concealing hunger
    Taunted taste
    Falling for capturing sin

    The bonding love
    Forever precarious
    Dancing from the fingertips
    The collision




    Submitted on 2009-04-06 20:15:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed reading this, the vocab was splendid, and the structure was excellent. I didnt find too many things out of place so ill just applaud your work. keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by essence of life | [ Reply to This ]
      i liek this!!! everything about it is perfect...great word choice...and i like the subject matter...
    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]


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