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    dots Submission Name: But Fordots

    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       For my grandfather: R.I.P. 04-03-2009

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    dotsBut Fordots

    The sun is but a ball of gas,
    if not for the dreams of man.
    A day is but a collection of hours,
    if not for that one warm smile.
    Such as this; you were just a man,
    but for the liveliness of your heart.
    It is in our grief we find you,
    laughing, smiling, crying.
    And when we see you there,
    awaiting our comfort,
    we cannot hope to feel sorrow
    for you do not abide it;
    and in that instant, neither can we.
    For now you arenít beyond us,
    above us, or below us;
    you are within us.
    And we cherish you,
    as a gardener to a tree.
    Letting it grow to new heights,
    and sitting beneath it,
    comforted by shade.

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    I enjoyed this - i especially like the thoughts i got that it's the littlest things that really make a difference. That single smile in the day, or when you remember someone like this - it's always the incidential things that make you laugh or cry. the things that wouldn't mean a single iota of anything to anyone else and that's what make our memories our own and therefore special
    Nice work - nice tribute.
    | Posted on 2009-04-07 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      This is just very thoughtful and lovely! It is warm, thoughtful and philosophical, and a fine tribute!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-04-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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