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    dots Submission Name: Welcome Todots
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    Author: Texan_Poet
    ASL Info:    20/F/daydreaming
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 127/123/48
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Story/Dark
    Total Views: 452
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 885



    Description:
       Yet another of my older poems. Enjoy.


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    dotsWelcome Todots
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    Welcome to my nightmare,
    This place of betrayal and lies.
    No one can be trusted here,
    Everyone is insane.
    They welcome you with open arms,
    And stab you in the back.
    They always say they'll be your friened,
    But they only use you.
    And what you have
    Is all that you are worth to them.

    I wish that I was brave enough
    To run away from this horrid place,
    For I want only to escapem
    But I'm trapped here...
    As are the others.
    I can leave, if I so choose.
    But they cannot,
    And I will NOT abandon them.
    So all I can do is try to shelter them,
    And beg someone for help
    By telling you this:
    Welcome to my pain,
    Welcome to my hurt,
    Welcome to my endless fear,
    Welcome to my nightmare,
    Welcome to my life.




    Submitted on 2009-04-07 09:57:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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