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    dots Submission Name: The Summer Lifedots

    Author: wolfgurl830
    ASL Info:    18/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 42/38/34
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 744
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThe Summer Lifedots

    Itís warm and sticky with kids at play
    Sprinklers are on for this hot summer day
    The cicadas are humming their sweet songs
    Birds twiddle and tweet
    You and your friends would love some Ice cream
    Animals are eating and sleeping
    Caring for their children along the way
    You get to sleep for the whole day
    The summer sun is bright gold
    People parting with stories that need to be told
    Teenagers flirting and trying to find the one
    While adults cant wait to do something fun
    You try to ignore it but the summer is calming down
    School is almost here the fun is done now
    All animals are getting ready for a deep rest
    You now see the sun less and less
    The leaves are leaving their Bright Jade
    Because summer is at its end
    Its not here to stay.

    Submitted on 2009-04-07 14:42:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem describes summer so very well, I can almost taste the air, and smell that summer scent just by reading this. I really like your descriptive ability, and you rhymed it all together so well!
    | Posted on 2009-10-11 00:00:00 | by minikitty | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing that's my type of summer , good poem
    | Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome that's exactly what summer is like
    | Posted on 2009-04-07 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]

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