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The Summer Life

Author: wolfgurl830
ASL Info:    18/F/OH
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Words: 144
Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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The Summer Life

It’s warm and sticky with kids at play
Sprinklers are on for this hot summer day
The cicadas are humming their sweet songs
Birds twiddle and tweet
You and your friends would love some Ice cream
Animals are eating and sleeping
Caring for their children along the way
You get to sleep for the whole day
The summer sun is bright gold
People parting with stories that need to be told
Teenagers flirting and trying to find the one
While adults cant wait to do something fun
You try to ignore it but the summer is calming down
School is almost here the fun is done now
All animals are getting ready for a deep rest
You now see the sun less and less
The leaves are leaving their Bright Jade
Because summer is at its end
Its not here to stay.

Submitted on 2009-04-07 14:42:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem describes summer so very well, I can almost taste the air, and smell that summer scent just by reading this. I really like your descriptive ability, and you rhymed it all together so well!
| Posted on 2009-10-11 00:00:00 | by minikitty | [ Reply to This ]
  amazing that's my type of summer , good poem
| Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
  awesome that's exactly what summer is like
| Posted on 2009-04-07 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]

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