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Robots puke oil

Author: Alexandra
ASL Info:    20/f/SC
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Words: 71
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Robots puke oil

we're all programmed into the world we live in.

consumed and transformed by Conformation Bias
contemporary thought corrupted by malice
power and greed blind all too easily
ambitions forgotten, such fragile morality.
good intentions lead countries astray:
motivation lightheartedly thrown away
progress inhibits the air we breathe
break countless backs to support the Beliefs.
machines work tirelessly keeping humans alive
robots puke oil while we survive.

Submitted on 2009-04-07 18:55:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it. There is one error that stands out to me: "break countless backs to support our believes"

You might have ment beliefs when you put believes.
| Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by Midorininja | [ Reply to This ]

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