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    dots Submission Name: it doesn't matter.dots
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    Author: xieno
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 7/16/24
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 583
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1282



    Description:
       Its good to find out you don't hate me. Oh, and you miss me too? Ha.
    It doesnt matter if I miss you as well, its not like im allowed to talk to you anyway.

    I'll write a bridge later. Maybe. If I get around to it. That means I probably won't.
    I just wanted to get this out in the open...


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    dotsit doesn't matter.dots
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    It's been a while, hasn't it?
    Last November doesn't even seem that long ago to me
    Have you tried erasing every thought you have of mine?
    I tried, but no one ever lets me
    I've been walking circles in the rain
    Yeah you know how that goes
    I've been trying to forget but
    Now everybody knows, so

    [chorus]
    Did you find what you wanted?
    Do you know what that is?
    Hard to tell if I miss you too but
    It doesn't matter
    No, it doesn't matter now
    I know what it is you wanted
    But I can't give it anymore
    Because I can't do this anymore...

    I should really listen more often
    Because everyone else is so much more right
    Than I will ever be
    I was waiting, it hurts doesn't it?
    When you find out how fake I am
    When you never thought I could be

    [chorus]
    Did you find what you wanted?
    Do you know what that is?
    Hard to tell if I miss you too but
    It doesn't matter
    No, it doesn't matter now
    I know what it is you wanted
    But I can't give it anymore
    Because I can't do this anymore...




    Submitted on 2009-04-07 22:38:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm kind of split on what to think about this honestly. Something about it just seems disorganized and thrown together quickly, yet it has good incite to what the emotions felt like for you and what you went through, to an above average extent. I give it a pretty decent score, but it could use some fine tuning. I think it's the chorus that does it. Using it doesn't matter now right after using it doesn't matter is fine if you don't repeat can't do this anymore right after. Be careful not to repeat too quickly.
    | Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]


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