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    dots Submission Name: Stone Age Chronicals of Man and Lifedots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 90
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    dotsStone Age Chronicals of Man and Lifedots
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    Intricate little bonds between friends
    Spark real meaning in the vacuum clouds
    Ablaze and immersed in kush haze and cancer sticks
    Rituals veiling me from the world
    And vice versa

    Controversial indulgences damned
    My shallow, once honorable vessel hull
    Encasing heart, tame mind, and solid morals
    Within my brittle bones and battered naiveté

    We starved ourselves for days and nights
    Fasting from the material,
    All consumed within our hunger
    our every wanton whim
    until we reward our willpower
    and slip slowly into the world of dreams.

    The emerald dream is a plane of pleasure
    Comfort, lazy warm illusionary peace,
    No worries, no time, taunting eternal
    Addicting, empowering, a maelstrom of depth
    Into the souls of the spirits that form our world
    Layers beyond layers of labyrinth realities
    Spawning universes out of each other,
    Dreams within dreams
    Shards of diamond cooked subconscious
    Bits of coal mulled over and over
    Into beautiful shining bits of perspective
    True perspective

    We embraced our sins in ceremony
    Drifting in limbo, lost and broken
    Tethered to this world of conflict
    Consumed by our rarest fulfillment
    Like ambrosia and the nectar of the gods
    We taste the sweetest honey the world has to offer
    And spend eternity craving the impossible






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      Well it's not that kinda warm and fuzzy feeling peom, but it was really something beautiful unlike anything i've ever read. Theres a certain high power quailty about this, like when you refer to bonds bettween friends and the vacuum cloud or the kush hase that just kinda makes you feel good about those days of inhaling your pleasure surrounded by all your best friends. I guess thats all we really need in life afterall. It's what keeps me going and gives the most, dispite the always wondering. :] Love Alice ((PsychedelicTeaPot))
    | Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by NakedSupernova | [ Reply to This ]


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