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    dots Submission Name: I Trydots

    Author: Whatamidoing
    ASL Info:    14 f scotland
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 2/3/6
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsI Trydots

    I try my best.
    I try to be liked,
    I try to be funny,
    I try to be creative,
    I try to fit in,
    I try to be something I'm not.

    I try my worse.
    I try not to be liked,
    I try not to be funny,
    I try not to be creative,
    I try not to fit in,
    I try not to be something I am.

    I try new styles,
    I try new personalities,
    I try new skills,
    I try to fit in some place new,
    I try to be a new person.

    I don't care anymore.
    I've decided,
    I'm going to end this miserable circle,
    I try , I don't try
    The only one who cares is this gun.

    Submitted on 2009-04-08 05:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I didn't quite get the part in the poem that said--oh, that was a simple error I suppose in poem. The part that says"I try to new a person." was it intended that way? Why? And if not, forgive me for commenting on such a thing. This poem reminds me of a poem I once wrote, and it describes my feelings sometimes. The poem made me feel lonely at the very end, sort of at a loss..Very good poem! Loved it all in all.
    | Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by ikoshima | [ Reply to This ]

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