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I Have

Author: Midorininja
ASL Info:    16/secret/Michigan
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Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I Have

My eyes weep,
They are half asleep.
They only cry,
For that simple good bye.
To leave me,
On a raft out at sea.
I am more than alone,
I am as solid as a stone.
I do not break,
For that small mistake.
I loved you once upon a time,
But now I do not need you to shine.
I have my smile,
At least for a little while.
I have my soul,
Half empty, or half full?
I have something that you never had,
If I told you, that would be bad.
I plan to keep it from you,
Until you come unglued.
I know to live for me,
The way it is supposed to be.

Submitted on 2009-04-08 08:04:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by Midorininja | [ Reply to This ]

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