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Lost My Way

Author: Midorininja
ASL Info:    16/secret/Michigan
Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 6 /9 /11
Words: 50
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Lost My Way

The sun sets under our feet,
Footsteps in the wet send.
Water rushes past our toes.
Tell me I’m crazy.
Wandering off into the sea of loneliness,
No where in sight.
I left you behind.
In a shallow fog.
I retraced my step
And come right back to you.

Submitted on 2009-04-08 08:15:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by Midorininja | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this poem
I can visualize the picture as I'm reading it
keep writing
| Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by Toosha | [ Reply to This ]

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