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    dots Submission Name: Hollow Lightdots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    Pray for the young, the ones who have yet to come
    Ignorance has undone a generation's worth of fun
    As I cry out to the son, you look at me like I'm the crazy one
    What's to be, whose to see, will we breathe without a belief?

    Hollow light
    Sacrifice
    Give it time, they'll take a life

    We have come of age, and a new prophet takes center stage
    The prices have been paid, but still they take and take
    What once was awake, has been left at the stake
    Never learn, nothing's earned, we are burned, past the point of return

    Hollow light
    Sacrifice
    Give it time, they'll take a life

    Land of the free, but we're crucified if we believe
    Land of the need, we give to those too willing to receive
    I pray that you see, I'm not second guessing eternity
    I won't make it long enough to see. twenty three
    Let me be

    Hollow light
    Sacrifice
    Give it time, they'll take a life
    Crucified
    Pay the price
    Belief in lies, we are sacrificed

    Hollow light
    Led by the blind
    We're past the point of return this time
    Hollow light




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