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    dots Submission Name: The Flamedots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 363
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsThe Flamedots
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    Sitting on my own as time passes by
    I think about my life, and how hard I tried
    But you can’t force love no matter how hard you try
    That is why, I have to tell you tonight
    That while love has had it’s way with me
    This seems different, like it could really be
    That flash in the sky, that star’s bright light
    You’re all that is on my mind

    In the wake of my greatest mistakes
    You walked into the dark to be my escape
    So I cock back and take aim, I fire away
    Fire

    All of this came to me as a great surprise
    Like the fourth of july, and in the black of night
    Beauty and color join as one under the moonlight
    It shines bright, like the reflection in your eyes
    It’s hypnotic, and I can’t look away
    I won’t turn back, i push on in all that I say
    Even if it takes all night, you will see that i
    Won’t just let this pass me by

    You can’t escape the hands of fate
    Whatever it takes, it is worth the wait
    So I cock back and take aim, I fire away
    Fire

    Even if I am destined to be alone
    Even if you’re meant for someone else to hold
    I have to let you know
    I have to let you know…

    I want you to see this inside of me
    A glimpse of hope where it seemed there’d never be
    Like fixing the cracks from what’s been ripped apart
    With your selflessness and your caring heart

    I know, I know, I know…

    I know that you care
    Your spirit’s always there
    I can only hope that a piece of mine
    Will bring comfort to you until the end of time

    All it takes, is for you to say my name
    And fire goes rushing through my veins
    A fire that lights the darkest days, set ablaze
    Fire

    And even if fate should take you away
    I’d leave you with these words I’d say
    I want to hold tight to this flame, keep it ablaze
    Fire




    Submitted on 2009-04-08 18:21:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This had some great imagery and emotional appeal. It looks like you might have cut and pasted the song into the ES format. All of you apostrophes are glitched. Take a read over it again and you will see what I mean.

    Keep writing.

    Greg
    | Posted on 2009-04-09 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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