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    dots Submission Name: Halodots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1594



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    dotsHalodots
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    chorus:
    What happened to your halo
    What happened to your halo
    DIdn't you feel so lucky to feel
    Something so penetrating
    Something so real

    What happened to your halo
    What happened to your...

    Wings that help you to fly
    Wings that show your innocent side
    I'll show you how to spread yours
    If you show me how to show mine
    Oh pretty angel, up there on high
    What's the price
    Of feeling something i'll never forget
    Of feeling something i'm bound to regret

    chorus

    What happened to your halo
    What happened to your...

    Light shining on your face
    Light shining showing your grace
    I'll give you what you've always wanted
    If you give me something to taste
    Time is ours, we've got so much to waste
    I need to replace
    The void that's filling nothing
    The voice that's screaming for something

    chorus

    What happend to your halo
    What happened to your...

    Purity you gave so hesitantly
    Purity that doesn't mean anything to me
    You must think i am blind
    Even a blind man could see
    That you're wanting to take it from me
    Set me free
    I need to feel like i exist
    I need to feel you

    chorus

    What happened to your halo
    What happened to your....
    What happened to your halo
    What happened to you




    Submitted on 2009-04-08 18:41:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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