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    dots Submission Name: Donedots
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    Author: ikoshima
    ASL Info:    15/Femalef/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 4/8/9
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 477
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsDonedots
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    Sacrificing myself.
    I peer through empty darkness.
    Bloody eyes pierce through me.
    If I blink I die.
    My eyes start to close.
    Death flashes before me.
    And that's just it.
    It's over.




    Submitted on 2009-04-08 19:00:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice, i like it alot. Remind me of stuff I did in sixth grade before I got really into storys. Keep working on your poetry it will make you feel better maybe, I know it's done wonders for myself! Keep it up :] Love ya and I'm glad to know I get to check on your page and hopefuly see more to comment on!
    | Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]


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