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    dots Submission Name: The Pearl Angeldots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Pearl Angeldots
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    There is a story that I must tell,
    A story so grand and bold,
    About the heavenly, pearl angel,
    With a shining heart of gold,

    She has warred against the viles of Hell,
    And ne'r forsook the Story of old,
    I speak of this daring, pearl angel,
    With an inspiring heart of gold,

    Her kindness springs up as a well,
    And her efforts cannot be sold,
    Oh! what a wonderful, pearl angel,
    With a caring heart of gold,

    Her sweet voice is as a bell,
    But not so sweet as her soul,
    Thank God for this magnificent, pearl angel,
    With a stunning heart of gold,

    Her beauty radiates as the grail,
    Her face gives youth to the old,
    Oh! for the grace of this elegant, pearl angel,
    With a breathtaking heart of gold,

    In awe men fell,
    And desired her hand to hold,
    But, oh! for this patient, pearl angel,
    With a praying heart of gold,

    She waits to break free from her lonely shell,
    And for true love to unfold,
    I wonder what will become of this special pearl angel,
    And her longing heart of gold.




    Submitted on 2009-04-10 13:49:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's for damn sure ain't poetry. You suck.
    | Posted on 2009-04-12 00:00:00 | by nsc | [ Reply to This ]


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