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    dots Submission Name: Understanding Us like Usdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsUnderstanding Us like Usdots

    Understanding Us like Us

    The failing pendulum
    Prevents the gravity of its swing


    Weighted to the stretching hours
    The loneliness pounds

    But the smile ever ready
    Turns its puppetry of normality
    And jerks the strings
    In the corners of eyes
    To pupil vacancy asking why
    Do you know me

    Turn me back from the ripples
    Spreading dissipation's of indefinite endings

    You see my shadow
    And nothing more

    You hear my voice
    Do not pay attention to the words

    All emotion conversed in ashes
    The time stretches


    But the ever ready smile
    Turns its normality of puppetry
    The jerking strings of despondency
    Hangs lifeless
    In the corners of eyes
    Speaking with pupil vacancy


    Do you know me

    Do you know me
    Where I lay hidden
    In an out-rush broken
    Navigating scars
    With a un-tuned compass of hope

    Have you seen me there; in the rages of burrows
    In fearful attempts to pick a lock
    Promising escape
    Break loose from the molasses thick misunderstanding

    The void

    The fractured space between us
    Its isolation condemned

    Its pitiful wail
    Heard only in the recesses of darkness

    But ever ready the smile
    Puppetry turn of its normality
    A masquerade so practiced carefully
    To disguise the sorrow
    And hide behind my pupils vacancy

    Asking why
    Who am I
    Do you know me

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