[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Understanding Us like Usdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 405
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1864


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsUnderstanding Us like Usdots

    Understanding Us like Us

    The failing pendulum
    Prevents the gravity of its swing


    Weighted to the stretching hours
    The loneliness pounds

    But the smile ever ready
    Turns its puppetry of normality
    And jerks the strings
    In the corners of eyes
    To pupil vacancy asking why
    Do you know me

    Turn me back from the ripples
    Spreading dissipation's of indefinite endings

    You see my shadow
    And nothing more

    You hear my voice
    Do not pay attention to the words

    All emotion conversed in ashes
    The time stretches


    But the ever ready smile
    Turns its normality of puppetry
    The jerking strings of despondency
    Hangs lifeless
    In the corners of eyes
    Speaking with pupil vacancy


    Do you know me

    Do you know me
    Where I lay hidden
    In an out-rush broken
    Navigating scars
    With a un-tuned compass of hope

    Have you seen me there; in the rages of burrows
    In fearful attempts to pick a lock
    Promising escape
    Break loose from the molasses thick misunderstanding

    The void

    The fractured space between us
    Its isolation condemned

    Its pitiful wail
    Heard only in the recesses of darkness

    But ever ready the smile
    Puppetry turn of its normality
    A masquerade so practiced carefully
    To disguise the sorrow
    And hide behind my pupils vacancy

    Asking why
    Who am I
    Do you know me

    Submitted on 2009-04-10 15:29:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    True Death written by layDsayD
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    AI written by poetotoe
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Every..... written by jackz
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Whiteout written by layDsayD




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]