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    dots Submission Name: Youíre Gonna Love Me till You Donít dots
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    Author: amrslamr
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 18/18/16
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       a bit of fun while facing reality.


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    Youíre Gonna Love Me till You Donít
    by amrslamr
    2008

    Youíre gonna love me till you donít.
    Itís gonna work until it wonít.
    Thereís nothing I could ever do
    To make you stay when love is through.

    Thereís not a thing that I can say
    To make you change your mind and stay.

    Youíre gonna be here till youíre gone,
    Itís gonna work until it wonít,
    Youíre gonna love me till you donít.




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    ||| Comments |||
      and it is what it is.

    this is simple but strikes a chord because it is the way of things.

    It's an appealing thing to be able to read pain and read between the lines of half-hearted jest.

    There is much here that is a gut-laughed cry,

    laughed even as you know there is no-one can hear it who could offer a pennies worth of change-- to the way it was.

    I think you could probably play around with the lines to provide book-marks for shock.

    This is good but I think it could be so good it makes you have to sit down and gut-laugh a sympathetic cry, even as you know...

    DB
    | Posted on 2009-04-11 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very nice...somethin id like to say to an ex. lol... nice job ill add it as a fav
    | Posted on 2009-04-10 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]


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