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    dots Submission Name: Youíre Gonna Love Me till You Donít dots
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    Author: amrslamr
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 18/18/16
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       a bit of fun while facing reality.


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    Youíre Gonna Love Me till You Donít
    by amrslamr
    2008

    Youíre gonna love me till you donít.
    Itís gonna work until it wonít.
    Thereís nothing I could ever do
    To make you stay when love is through.

    Thereís not a thing that I can say
    To make you change your mind and stay.

    Youíre gonna be here till youíre gone,
    Itís gonna work until it wonít,
    Youíre gonna love me till you donít.




    Submitted on 2009-04-10 18:16:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      and it is what it is.

    this is simple but strikes a chord because it is the way of things.

    It's an appealing thing to be able to read pain and read between the lines of half-hearted jest.

    There is much here that is a gut-laughed cry,

    laughed even as you know there is no-one can hear it who could offer a pennies worth of change-- to the way it was.

    I think you could probably play around with the lines to provide book-marks for shock.

    This is good but I think it could be so good it makes you have to sit down and gut-laugh a sympathetic cry, even as you know...

    DB
    | Posted on 2009-04-11 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very nice...somethin id like to say to an ex. lol... nice job ill add it as a fav
    | Posted on 2009-04-10 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]


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