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    dots Submission Name: Laughsdots
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    Author: Peacejoe
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 30/29/23
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 679
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       Ok, this is something I did during a 15 minute study hall and it is completely free written. It took a "Hey, what the heck!" from a guy to make me stop writing this. I've tried freewriting before on paper, but with no point and no story. I tore up half of the paper in the legal pad, and snapped the pen in half because I got so angry while writing. lol So here is the poem.


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    Sit in the shadows.
    Wait.
    Donít do anything at all.
    A cloak over your eyes
    And watch.
    Watch as people go by
    They wonder who you are.
    Watch as the people wonder why
    And why is that man sitting alone?
    Why, is it alone?
    Why?

    Why do I sit alone?
    How is it to be in the dark?
    Itís dark, depressing, sad,
    But why does it feel right?

    When you realize what people are,
    You never want to see them again,
    Never again,
    Never will,
    WONíT follow their ways.
    Sick, self righteous,
    Suicidal,
    Laughing,
    Laughing,
    Why is it there?
    What do they see?
    Nothing, but they laugh,
    How?
    How?!

    Then they see you.
    And snap out for a while,
    Wonder why your alone,
    And then move onward.
    Never thinking,
    Moving forward,
    Not turning back,
    To look at the awful truth,
    Thereís something in the world,
    That always lives alone,
    The knowledge that thereís so much more
    Than blindness




    Submitted on 2009-04-11 00:30:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. gosh you sure did say alone alot. this actually should of been named lonely.. honestly it just makes you feel like your completely alone, and that even though as those people are around you.. they dont understand nor really see you. so youll forever be alone. good write.
    | Posted on 2011-04-15 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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