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    dots Submission Name: Forces Against Medots

    Author: einna
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 11/13/14
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       What life feels like for me.

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    dotsForces Against Medots

    Mother Nature bashes me with her sunny days;
    Throws me off balance with her temperature change;
    Keeps in doors with wet heavy air;
    Cuts and pulls at me with her angry claws;
    Laughs and mocks me with thunderous roars.
    God laughs at me with societies ways;
    Puts me in awkward situations way out of my range;
    Isolates me in a dunces chair;
    He emphasizes my every flaw;
    And pokes and prods and my every sore.
    Some other force pushes me through an unsolvable maze;
    Segregates me by the definition of strange;
    Animates me with an angry flare;
    Laughs at my beliefs opposite to that of the "univeral" laws;
    Uses me as a mop, for everyone elses floors.

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      Super. This captures much that is common to many who are born of a nature to test for themselves the edges of all "normal" expectations. Yes, you are being stressed by the various commonalities of life as if on the forge of God, being hammered so as to become something even more special.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-02-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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