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    dots Submission Name: Starvingdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 647/1087/624
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsStarvingdots
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    I think I am going to let myself starve
    Put me out on the hammock in the blistering pre-summer sunshine
    and let the birds pick my bones clean
    They will bleach in the sun
    and you can use my ribs for drums
    You have such a good sense of rhythm
    Do not let me go to waste

    I already jut out at angles
    My elbows are sharp
    My hipbones stick into you
    Until you cannot breathe
    Nothing is soft here anymore
    Lay me in the green grass ocean
    Let me sink into nothing

    I think you worry too much
    I am not your fault
    The coughing is not too bad
    Sickness is only half of me
    It hasn't eaten my lungs yet
    It has only flooded my stomach
    Still leaching its way up my spine

    I think a little hunger will be good for me
    Nothing should come too easy
    Sleep will be relieving




    Submitted on 2009-04-11 22:37:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked teh flwo this had good job it got a point acrosss with out lossing me it was realtable
    | Posted on 2009-04-16 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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