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    dots Submission Name: The Music We Playeddots
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    Author: einna
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 11/13/14
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 593
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 802



    Description:
       I miss my boyfriend...


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    dotsThe Music We Playeddots
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    I still recall
    The music we played
    When together.
    I fantasize alone
    The music yet to come
    When we meet again.
    I cry in wanting
    What I can not have.
    You tell me "in time,"
    But I can not wait that long...
    The music still sings in my ears
    Everytime you say hello...
    Everytime I see others kiss,
    It stings my very heart.
    I turn away to call again,
    And whisper my question again,
    "How long?"
    The music crowds my mind
    And keeps me from sleep.
    I try to ignore it,
    But the volume only goes up.
    Finally I hear your laugh,
    or your sleepy, cuddly voice...
    The music becomes too much
    And I'll do anything for your touch.




    Submitted on 2009-04-12 19:24:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Again, quite powerful. It does exactly what poetry is supposed to and I'm in no position to suggest any criticism or helpful hint.
    | Posted on 2010-02-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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