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    dots Submission Name: Rue Yourselfdots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    27/M/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 23/54/57
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Rant/Religious
    Total Views: 57
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1203



    Description:
       ALright, so this doesn't seem like i'm talking about anything really, but its actually about the bible, religion, and authorities corrupt. Reread it a few times and maybe you can jump up to my level and say, "Hey! This kid's got a point!"
    Or say:
    "This kid's a fucking idiot."
    Either or, I hope you enjoy my nonsense, because I sure do!


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    dotsRue Yourselfdots
    -------------------------------------------


    A single eye
    held in the sky
    by nothing but reason
    which doesn't seem to exist
    but still
    reality seems to resist
    the probing mind
    of scientist's
    from a different time.
    It never seems to blink
    its stare
    hotter than the sun
    burning everyone
    but not leaving
    smoke and ashes
    No,
    there is no evidence.
    Instead it sees through
    the silence of your lips
    and then it starts to slip
    into your mind
    drilling like a woodpecker on crack.
    You don't even seem to notice
    the information
    seeping out of you
    like a puddle of goo
    underneath your door
    red like gore.
    Even though I speak
    truth,
    You seem to disbelieve,
    fool.
    I read once about a man
    who never could stand,
    yet one day
    he entered a race;
    Sitting on a chair of wheels
    he won,
    he made it to the end
    of his life.
    Yes, he died.
    And the moral is
    to not seek your own morals out of stupid stories!

    finfinfin
    end
    -eggshells-




    Submitted on 2009-04-12 22:25:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "Woodpecker on crack." Oh, that's a funny line.
    It was interesting, and yes in some cases, the BIble and the power that comes with being able to "interpret it" corrupts enormously. The lines being not spaced at all was a bit hard on the eyes, though. Amusing powers of simile shown.

    Slainte,

    DW
    | Posted on 2009-04-13 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]


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