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    dots Submission Name: nightdots
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    Author: cha
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 37/28/31
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 517
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsnightdots
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    Somewhere in the night a child cries,
    A woman weeps and someone dies.
    Somewhere in the night, humanity hides.

    Somewhere in the night , a soul screams,
    As people fade and die, lost in dreams.
    Somewhere in the night, reality lives.

    Somewhere in the night loneliness dwells,
    As people die, no sounding bells.
    Somewhere in the night, she dies alone.

    Somewhere in the night ...

    Where is the light?





    Submitted on 2009-04-13 09:24:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i enjoyed it. but i didn't like the repetition when you talked about people dying. the repetition of "somewhere in the night" fit perfectly, however.

    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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