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    dots Submission Name: Possible book??? idk, random idea.dots
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    Author: Texan_Poet
    ASL Info:    20/F/daydreaming
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 127/123/48
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 591
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    Description:
       NOT FINISHED.... Not much time to type, just hashing out ideas. Suggestions are welcome. I will be adding to it as I have time. I have quite a bit put down in a spiral, so I guess we will see how things turn out.


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    dotsPossible book??? idk, random idea.dots
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    "What could they be doing?"
    "Why are they training like that?"
    "Are they expecting an attack??"
    "SILENCE!!"
    Absoloute quiet decended so fast that you could still hear people in the back of the croud inhaling to voice another fearfull question. IceWind, the leader of the Third Eye Coven, turned and spoke to his second in command.
    "FireStorm. Stay here and watch them. I want a full report in three hours. If anything of interest happens, send word at once."
    FireStorm, simply Storm to his friends, languidly turned his head to look at his commander, his silky onyx hair falling over misty eyes. "As you wish, Father."

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      "...his silky onyx hair falling over misty eyes"

    I'd love to see that in real life on guy offcourse!. Sounds like a good idea, I wish you'd write some more because I'm already hooked.

    Just one thing, maybe you could change their names? You don't have to, it just sounds a little clichéd to me. But Storm on its own is good, I like it.

    It's awesome so far, I want to read more :)

    Iffy
    | Posted on 2009-04-24 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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