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    dots Submission Name: Blurb 3 The mysterious mandots
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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 351
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       This is the third blurb. My book will be available for purchase on Wednesday through www.lulu.com the title is "Sonya's Renegades" check it out you can buy a hard copy for 9 dollars or download it to your comp for 4.


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    dotsBlurb 3 The mysterious mandots
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    Sonya and Chris ran down the stairs to the engine room, all of the soldiers were brutally murdered. Blood, guts and skulls filled the areas around the engine room. Blades was curled in a ball in the corner.
    "Are you all right, Blades?" Sonya asked very concerned.
    "Yeah...I don't know what is in there but it destroyed everyone in a matter of seconds!" Blades said scared. The three of them changed back to their normal attire and entered further into the engine room. It smelled like carnage the steam from the engine made the blood from all over the room attack Sonya's taste buds. There was only one man standing attempting to disconnect parts of the engine. He was six foot five, wearing black sweat pants with a dark red vest over a white t-shirt, and a helmet on his head.
    "H-Hey!?" Sonya said afraid of him. He turned around.
    "What do you want?" He said with a deep voice filled with pure anger.
    "How...how are you alive?"
    "Hahahaha! Who are you again?"
    "Sonya Roseline..."
    "Oh right, Sonya!" He said interupting her. "Will you be joining the celebration?"
    "Celebration for what?"
    "Celebration for my saving the world of course! Now that I am here I am going to kill Jack and all of Acid and save humanity!"
    "I can't let you do that!" Sonya said standing in a fighting stance.
    "HAHAHAHA! Silly girl! See you in Plaistow!" He then moved his arm horizontally to the right and she and her renegades were pushed to the side. His sword in his left hand began glowing and he jumped up and flew out of the room and off the cruise ship.
    "Well, at least he didn't destroy the engine." Chris said.
    "I have a feeling stopping him will be a worse task than we might want to believe..." Sonya said brushing herself off.
    "Our destination to Mexico has been reached." A voice said over the P.A system.




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