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    dots Submission Name: I don't love you know more!dots
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    Author: justkillme08
    ASL Info:    18/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97/170/124
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 564
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    Description:
       This was about my longest relationship. Someone I thought I honestly loved and I thought he felt the same. But Once A Cheater Always A Cheater! NEVER THINK DIFFERENT!!! Live & Learn!


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    The day was dark,
    My heart was torn,
    Another step,
    I could've of sworn,
    It wasn't my last,

    I wished it was,
    How could he do this,
    What had I done?
    I would of never thought,
    My life would feel done,

    In the halls,
    I didn't want to look,
    He didn't care,
    But somehow I took,
    A few long days,
    And forgave him for what?

    Come to find out,
    After a long ten months,
    He'd done it again,
    But not just once,
    Honest truth,
    I don't know how much.

    He'd sworn he loved me,
    My stupid head believed it were true,
    But that day was the last,
    And finally I was through.

    I knelt on my knees,
    I prayed for strength,
    I didn't want to hurt no more,
    I really didn't want this pain,

    As I started to talk,
    My eyes flooded with tears,
    I said I couldn't do it no more,
    Then he said come me,
    The first time since he first cheated,
    He showed compassion.

    No I wasn't going to fall for it,
    I didn't care anymore,
    I looked in his eyes,
    And told him what was in my heart,

    I could tell he felt something,
    When I told him what I did,
    Then I walked out his door,
    Never wanting to talk to him again.

    When I was leaving,
    He tried to make me come back,
    With saying you leave,
    I wont be here for you again.

    But I knew what I was doing,
    When I felt the relieve.
    I was so happy I said it.
    Those words of defeat.

    No more worries,
    No more fears,
    No more crying,
    Except happy tears!




    Submitted on 2009-04-13 15:41:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very heartfelt , i feel your hurt and anger , revive from the ashes of dispair , your thoughts are strong , words standing for what you mean, great poem , keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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