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Inmaculada


Author: JoJoCrab
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Words: 51
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Inmaculada



Lying upon wet grass
Gazing to the clouds
A woman of contour
I see
Dancing unnoticed
Silent music
Poetry in motion
Amaze to her beauty
May I have the next selection I say?
Refusal is unquestionable
Attendance not required
Our desires are mixed
A cloud I cannot reach





Submitted on 2009-04-14 00:52:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Like love, clouds can also be fleeting. Well written, the description was very good.

Frank.
| Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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