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    dots Submission Name: Inmaculadadots
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    Author: JoJoCrab
    Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 338/113/129
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsInmaculadadots
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    Lying upon wet grass
    Gazing to the clouds
    A woman of contour
    I see
    Dancing unnoticed
    Silent music
    Poetry in motion
    Amaze to her beauty
    May I have the next selection I say?
    Refusal is unquestionable
    Attendance not required
    Our desires are mixed
    A cloud I cannot reach





    Submitted on 2009-04-14 00:52:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Like love, clouds can also be fleeting. Well written, the description was very good.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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