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Submission Name: Inmaculada dots

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Author:	JoJoCrab
Elite Ratio:	1.06 - 338/113/129
Words:	51

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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Inmaculada dots

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Lying upon wet grass
Gazing to the clouds
A woman of contour
I see
Dancing unnoticed
Silent music
Poetry in motion
Amaze to her beauty
May I have the next selection I say?
Refusal is unquestionable
Attendance not required
Our desires are mixed
A cloud I cannot reach

Submitted on 2009-04-14 00:52:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Like love, clouds can also be fleeting. Well written, the description was very good.

Frank.
| Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
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