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    dots Submission Name: Guidance calls, we remain lostdots
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    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       It's about...having all the answers of how to do it right and still not getting things done. I need help fixing this one up, there's something wrong with it...


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    dotsGuidance calls, we remain lostdots
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    The mighty call still echoes
    between mountains, trees and concrete structures.
    But how many ears are let to send it
    into the heart of the brain?

    The mighty words are intact and secure
    imprinted in hearts and on fine paper.
    But the books collect dust like china and crystal;
    And the hearts fade...

    We have forgotten our way
    Though our very world is a map.
    Then how absurd that we are lost?
    It is only because of us.

    For blind eyes can't see,
    Deaf ears cannot hear;
    Only open hearts can recieve
    what closed doors cannot.




    Submitted on 2009-04-14 06:00:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ahh, such a true depiction of humans,experience teaches us more that it all could have been avoided if we actually read the manual.
    | Posted on 2009-06-03 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]


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