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A nightly being


Author: JoJoCrab
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Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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A nightly being



As the night fluctuates
Transformation I go
A minion
Beastly is the man entering the inner region
Sinister thoughts rages
A hideous marvel molds
Threatening am I
Purity was I, once otherwise
Unleash inhumanity sight
Help
No creature be knowledgeable
Secrects I keep, but will not share
A life of turmoil is my passage
Impenetrable
Passing of dawn
A coolness to calm
Another existence that breathes
Awaken a living being




Submitted on 2009-04-14 08:58:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i liked the way you showed the transformation. it shows a very dark side to the poem. nice one there....
| Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]


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