A nightly being

Author: JoJoCrab Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 338 /113 /129 Words: 70

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A nightly being

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As the night fluctuates Transformation I go A minion Beastly is the man entering the inner region Sinister thoughts rages A hideous marvel molds Threatening am I Purity was I, once otherwise Unleash inhumanity sight Help No creature be knowledgeable Secrects I keep, but will not share A life of turmoil is my passage Impenetrable Passing of dawn A coolness to calm Another existence that breathes Awaken a living being

Submitted on 2009-04-14 08:58:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i liked the way you showed the transformation. it shows a very dark side to the poem. nice one there....

| Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]

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