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    dots Submission Name: The Seshat Headdressdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    5.99 - 174/192/133
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Seshat Headdressdots
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    The Nile riverfront is awash with rich tones
    golden sand, brilliant white water, and thriving greenery
    scenery too heavy for the papyrus its printed on
    the sky is ablaze with the reddish orange of iron rust
    dirty yellows cascade about the passion charred city-scape of Cairo
    hazy with smog and smothered by a blanket of hot stale air
    the sun setting casts shadows about the streets like ghost riders
    four mounted omens of doom and decadence
    and the darkness takes root in the river's delta
    mixing and churning the sediment to clay
    to be molded and sculpted by sharp falcon hands
    with prodding finger-tips like talons
    into a simple ankh of immortality
    baked black and sharp by the elements
    into igneous obsidian
    amidst the fields of the Garden of Cafour
    sand glass shards are encrusted into strands of hemp
    tethered to the limp, free-hanging symbol of eternity
    ominous jagged coal and glossed emerald crystal
    lush thick lazy opal plumes cascade across the country-side
    where fakirs breathe In the pearl and budding life
    burnt and coiled down the long necked pipes
    of blind prophets, glazing over the iris
    loosening the shackles of the soul
    and guiding the dye-dipped camel hair
    of drugged out poets of the past
    into cunning mastery of craft
    ash spirits are exhaled into the crisp dark of night
    where indigo and violet hues stain the horizon bold
    battering and bruising the heavens
    peppered with shooting stars
    a stellar tapestry





    Submitted on 2009-04-14 10:36:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      To be completely honest with you this is the best poem I've read in a while. I love how descriptive you are. There aren't often times I can read a poem and be put into the place someones talking about. You have the ability to transfer the reader. I could see the blind prophets and the igneous obsidean was probably my favorite line for some reason. I honestly found no fault with it. Some might tell you to be less descriptive and spit it out already. But, I've always admired an artist who's masterpiece is painting with words. :o)

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    | Posted on 2009-04-15 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]



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