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    dots Submission Name: acoustic transcenddots
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    Author: haruki0917
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/1/3
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       this one's for a very close friend... whom i almost fell for...


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    dotsacoustic transcenddots
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    He was a charming, young fellow
    Who wore dark hues
    With his punk hairstyle

    He sat by the window
    Beside the old lamp on the table
    Picked up his guitar
    And started playing some chords

    He looked down on the floor
    The wind blew against his face
    His eyes remained motionless
    As if stranded in deep space

    He sang along with the tune
    Such a soothing voice he had
    It reminded me of the days
    When I used to wish on the stars

    He chased after the lyrics
    A breathe for every word
    As he drown himself in the music
    I was awakened by his song

    He belonged to another world...




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