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    dots Submission Name: An inner imagedots

    Author: JoJoCrab
    Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 338/113/129
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsAn inner imagedots

    I am free
    As the spirits lay me to rest
    Repenting the ancients
    A world with man at helm
    Remembering once
    As the crow flies, I look
    Fought into the night as we exchange
    I will not give up
    A peasant inside became a flea
    Unarmed as sentiments remorse
    Deceitfulness is madness
    An enemy disrupts with calamity
    A passive apprehension
    On a peaceful day
    Boldness makes your blood boil
    Why am I here?

    Submitted on 2009-04-14 12:30:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh My lordy! This is really good:D You could have made it a little bit longer but whatever.It kindof reminds me of something Edgar Allen Poe would write.
    | Posted on 2009-04-23 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
      Once deceived, itís so difficult to get back to reality, to get back to that controlled world, you and so many others before you, were used to. There is always so many questions and few answers, but I am sure in due time, your wounds would heel and you will get back to that place you were once so used to.
    | Posted on 2009-04-15 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]

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