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Author: JoJoCrab
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I am free
As the spirits lay me to rest
Repenting the ancients
A world with man at helm
Remembering once
As the crow flies, I look
Fought into the night as we exchange
I will not give up
A peasant inside became a flea
Unarmed as sentiments remorse
Deceitfulness is madness
An enemy disrupts with calamity
A passive apprehension
On a peaceful day
Boldness makes your blood boil
Why am I here?

Submitted on 2009-04-14 12:30:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh My lordy! This is really good:D You could have made it a little bit longer but whatever.It kindof reminds me of something Edgar Allen Poe would write.
| Posted on 2009-04-23 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
  Once deceived, it’s so difficult to get back to reality, to get back to that controlled world, you and so many others before you, were used to. There is always so many questions and few answers, but I am sure in due time, your wounds would heel and you will get back to that place you were once so used to.
| Posted on 2009-04-15 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]

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