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Stir Me Alive

Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Stir Me Alive

Please rouse me from
This slumber, stir me alive.
Take me to a scenic cliff
So i can imagine the dive.
Do these viens
Beneath my wrists
Even function,
Much less exist?
Does the flesh that
Occupies this space
Even come with
A real face?
I hate tonight
That i am real
And even more
That i can feel.

Submitted on 2009-04-14 13:03:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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