Stir Me Alive

Author: Voodoo_Lounge ASL Info:    21/F/OH Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171 Words: 76

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Stir Me Alive

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Please rouse me from This slumber, stir me alive. Take me to a scenic cliff So i can imagine the dive. Do these viens Beneath my wrists Even function, Much less exist? Does the flesh that Occupies this space Even come with A real face? I hate tonight That i am real And even more That i can feel.

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