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    Author: Vampiric Death
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    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsThe Falldots
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    In this life,
    so proud and tall,
    we walk a ledge
    oblivious of the fall.

    For glory and honor,
    for greatness we search;
    but are so unprepared
    when we fall from the perch.

    What is so wrong
    with this human race
    that we should always fall
    and never walk with grace?




    Submitted on 2009-04-14 13:04:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is so simple and straight forward i feel it.
    | Posted on 2009-04-15 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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