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    dots Submission Name: musedots

    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    It takes two to tango,
    and they say love's a dance;
    so hold me close baby,
    let's give us a chance.

    I know I am stubborn,
    baby you are too,
    yet you're perfect for me,
    as I hope I am for you.

    My heart isn't so open,
    It's hard for you to see,
    but if you'll kick down the walls,
    you'll find emotions three:

    Fear for being hurt,
    as I have in the past,
    envy of your friends,
    they've seen you last;

    but stronger than any,
    love resides within,
    and if you give me a chance,
    I'll prove it time and again.

    Submitted on 2009-04-14 13:05:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yay!Great job.You are indeed a very good writter.Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-05-21 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
      In my opinion, this is amazing. The emotion over took me as a reader. This is one of the poems I would read over and over.

    ~Jessica ^o^
    | Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by Midorininja | [ Reply to This ]

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