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    dots Submission Name: i hate you...me...this...dots

    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsi hate you...me...this...dots

    i hate you, i hate you
    i hate me
    i hate everything about this
    i hate your cocky smile
    i hate your huge...
    and your stupid cloths
    i hate how your so caring
    i hate that you make me feel
    i hate everything inside
    i hate the laugh you give me
    a smile that doesn't look right
    with these sad eyes...
    shut up, quit lying
    i'm not beautiful!
    i'm scarred from head to toe
    i'm crazy
    no one can save me...
    broken and lost
    i have no heart left
    your so stupid
    why do you stay
    why do you take this
    all i do is hurt you
    i don't want to
    this is all i do
    crippled emotions
    from all that is past...
    just let me die here
    rot alone
    this is too much
    your so sweet
    the best
    i'll never be enough
    not what you deserve
    yet i'm so afraid if you go...
    will i stay clean...
    will i never touch a knife...
    will i stay away from dirty little boys...
    too willing
    only to please...
    is that me still?
    i changed for you
    i can't let this grow stronger...
    you'll be broken too
    so should the hurting stop
    while i'm still able to breathe?
    i love you
    i hate you
    no...i hate me

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      it did feel ranty so to speak like it needed structure but perhaps that was what you were going for i liked the feeling but the repatitive I hate felt i dont know out of place good work though in whole
    | Posted on 2009-04-16 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      interresting rant. loved it.

    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

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