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    dots Submission Name: Can you heal it. You can heal it.dots

    Author: longwinterdays
    ASL Info:    21/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 204/190/64
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I was just sitting thinking about how my lip hurt, and my heart just felt like exploding with words. This is what came out.

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    dotsCan you heal it. You can heal it.dots

    The hurt is written in
    curves and jagged print
    up and down that snow
    white skin.
    Screams hatred down her
    sides. Legs crying out
    for the thing no one......
    no one can see.

    Feel it coursing does it
    rip apart the same?
    Crying tears of the stars
    lighting up the hopeless
    Feel it? Can you heal it?

    Reaching out into dark
    unknown skies
    Secrets poured out over
    the milky way galaxy
    Pain given into the night
    Turning it over.

    Never took the time
    Response felt unneeded
    you dissected this all wrong
    She didn't need the stares
    of disappointment
    Held in your heart, pour
    it out on her...
    show maybe someone cares

    Feel it coursing does it
    rip apart the same, now
    Crying those tears of the stars
    lighting up, us, the hopeless
    Feel it?? Do you feel it???
    Can you heal it?? You CAN heal it.

    Submitted on 2009-04-14 15:48:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      makes me think of firestarter. hardcore techno dance groove with splashes of electric lip-gloss and blacklight makeout among the living dead.
    you thank.
    | Posted on 2009-04-16 00:00:00 | by milovelocity | [ Reply to This ]

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