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    dots Submission Name: Bleeddots

    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Come on baby, close your eyes,
    embrace our moment, our true decline.
    we kill ourselfs with every breath,
    the pills, the tar, and all the meth.
    Our days meld into one blurry haze,
    we are left lost like a rat in a maze.
    We fall so hard, we are a slave to our diease,
    we are a couple mice, needing our cheese.

    Every night the spoon gets hot,
    A liqiufied demon in every shot.
    Pale skin and punctured veins,
    we line your street with our sweet candy canes.
    We burn our days away at full speed,
    come on baby, its our time to bleed.
    The sand falls faster with every breath,
    A slave to the tar, the pills, and the meth.

    Our skin is battle hardened from this fucked up little war,
    every day our arms hurt a little bit more.
    So here we are baby, this is the game we play,
    I know this is forever, no matter what you say,
    nothing can save us, to far in to back out,
    you say that we can kick this, But man I have some doubts,
    every day slips away at such a rapid speed,
    come on baby, its our time to bleed

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      this reminds me of a scene out of requiem for a dream, where that kid is laying there in the hospital bed and he doesnt know they amputated his arm from shooting a fire breathing dragon in the same vein over and over, then he looks down and just starts screaming. that mess is effed up. but being a substance abuser myself. i can relate to this not in a chasing that dragon way, more like a puff the magic dragon way, catch my contact? all in all its hard to keep addiction at bay. and its nice to place those thoughts on paper to look at them and then weigh them on your life scale.
    to figure out if you really need these crutches to walk.
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by ghad | [ Reply to This ]
      Every night the spoon gets hot,
    A liqiufied demon in every shot.
    Pale skin and punctured veins,

    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by die_another_day | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked teh subject matter you have tackled something that needs to be seen that is always scary to me congrates i do hope you are not writing of personal experiance id hate to think of a mind like your ruined i have only one nit pick i didnt likethe cheese line it made it trivial to me but i am a silly blonde and get stuck on lil things i will read more of your work for sure
    | Posted on 2009-04-16 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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