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    dots Submission Name: divorce is a shit bucketdots
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    Author: Black Rock Tractor
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 555/824/140
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsdivorce is a shit bucketdots
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    missing you will be better than
    hating what we've become
    and living it

    or am I just running away and destroying the
    best thing I've ever let go bad?

    at least this way, I will always love you
    and I miss
    always loving you

    I miss feeling loved by you,
    and either way I always will

    or wouldn't I? The question bursts through me
    and back again, and it will not stop.




    Submitted on 2009-04-16 03:08:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great title.
    | Posted on 2010-03-16 00:00:00 | by blacksail | [ Reply to This ]
      Missing the way things were at the very beginning and always wondering whether the choices made right now is the right one or not.

    I'm actually going through the whole divorce thing and this piece really hit me because it's straight to the point. There is nothing added to it, there is no imagery. There is just the truth; how much divorce is a Sh*t bucket.

    I'm going to add this as my favs. In my head as i read this over and over again, I'm thinking "I miss the loving and the me loving you back". I really like this.

    Have a great day.

    Irina
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      i shouldn't, but this is good and I'll acknowledge this.

    it's honest stuff and I like the fact that in your writing you seem to let the ideas do the walking instead of the pretty ribbon of dressed up language,

    it's rather tender this and allows you to see into someone's pain with a hawk eye.

    Quite mature too, expressing that it's better to give something up and always know it rather than to carry on and lose even the last of it.

    I thought you were going to be a cynic there at the end,
    but even as he looked down that road the state of not being in control reared its ugly head in the nicest way, you can try to make choices, blame yourself for ruining the best thing you ever had but at some point you begin to realize that at some point it no longer lay in your hands...

    there's a lot to read in this poem and those are always the best kind.

    Now if you'd be kind enough to acknowledge my time in any way shape or form that would be quite lovely too, if this is merely a case of me telling you how good you are and you nodding in agreement then let's just carry this over, as a ditto to anything else you might post in the future.

    It's good/great work
    as far as I can tell.
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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