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    dots Submission Name: grapdots

    Author: lavaheart
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    did twilight angels whisper
    grandpa when they took your hand
    at sundown red flamingos
    dance on blue rippled sand
    autumn waves her colours afloat
    where is my best friend

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